Swallow Point Keep Tales

[Kestrad]

Light magi? Is that a hint as to why Celli doesn´t have much success with fire?

Calida´s reaction seems a bit illogical to me...the alicanto and tylluan followed on their own accord and were not called so "blaming" Lachesis seems a bit strange to me right now

Other than that, another nicely written chapter

Shhh, that's a secret!

You're right, though, I guess it is a bit illogical, though since I'm too lazy to change that right now I'll just justify it as Calida being illogical because of jealousy >.>

[Munin]

It´s not a big thing, just thought I´d point it out...sometimes when wrapped up in a pic I start loosing the "overall perspective" and things won´t fit the way they are supposed to anymore...I imagined it might be the same with storytelling, that you´re so wrapped up in the current scene that the matter if things are in character for the person/creature in question don´t fit anymore. *fails at explaining*

[Kestrad]

No, no, you don't fail at explaining! What you said is very true. At least for me, I get wrapped up in an individual chapter very easily, so it's like you said--I start to lose track of the overall piece. I definitely felt like Calida's characterization needed some work when I went and reread the chapter, but since I can't figure out exactly what to change I'm tempted to just say that she's jealous and leave it at that

[Inspirit]

The chapters are written very well..I like them.
Can't wait for the next chapter.

[Kestrad]

Thanks Hanako!

No, I haven't forgotten about this story. Just suffering from serious writer's block at the moment. I guess I'll just go and edit the first two chapters in the meantime.