Hollyleaf's Death; My version

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Hollyleaf's Death; My version

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Yeah...I've been thinking about making my own version of Hollyleaf's death. Critique is welcomed, as long as it's constructive. There are spoilers in the next sentence:

Hollyleaf didn't get crushed by the rockfall. She somehow escaped, or got trapped in another tunnel. The reason I know is because I've read Omen of the Stars; The Sign of The Moon. So this is one where she actually dies.

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Hollyleaf's sides heaved. She skidded to a halt at the mouth of the tunnel. Heavy rain poured down on her, making her pelt heavy with rainwater.

She turned around to see Lionblaze and Jayfeather looking at her with expressions full of shock and concern. A stab of regret pierced her heart. She turned back with a shake of her head, closing her eyes.

I'm sorry, Jayfeather, Lionblaze, she thought. I know I made the right decision, but no one will ever understand!

Hollyleaf opened her eyes and stepped into the tunnel, ignoring her brothers' cry of alarm.

I have to do this.
It's for the good of my clan.

She turned around and locked eyes with Jayfeather and Lionblaze. A pair of Amber and blue eyes stared back. Come back! They pleaded. Hollyleaf shook her head. You don't understand.

A faint rumbling could be heard now, and was growing louder by the second. Hollyleaf frantically searched her brothers' gazes. The rumbling sound turned into a roar.

Forgive me! She pleaded.

Then, there was darkness.

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