Gonna make a couple of changes, you made some good points but one thing:
I meant 'warmth of memory' because they have lost the comfort that memory brings. They forgot the Keep (home of the magi in this world, silly ) and thus (i love that word) were unable to draw comfort from the past, they went on with no respite from their suffering.
The Wanderer and the Whitestone ((a legend of the tundra.))
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Re: The Wanderer and the Whitestone ((a legend of the tundra.))
Shadow always may be wrong, she's the first to admit that. And all changes are entirely up to you ^^;Finlandia wrote:Gonna make a couple of changes, you made some good points but one thing:
I meant 'warmth of memory' because they have lost the comfort that memory brings. They forgot the Keep (home of the magi in this world, silly ) and thus (i love that word) were unable to draw comfort from the past, they went on with no respite from their suffering.
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Re: The Wanderer and the Whitestone ((a legend of the tundra.))
A simply beautiful story. I enjoyed it very much.
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Re: The Wanderer and the Whitestone ((a legend of the tundra.))
That means a lot coming from you!Niwer wrote:A simply beautiful story. I enjoyed it very much.
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