Butterfly/Moth Drakes | New Pictures Up!

[Somatomay]

well there are several that may look well, depending on what coloring you choose.

http://files.turbosquid.com/Preview/Con ... gLarge.jpg

http://twistedphysics.typepad.com/cockt ... terfly.jpg

http://www.richard-seaman.com/Arthropod ... tended.jpg

one of these may look nice on the wings. personally, i like the simple blue. *not sure if links will work*

The blue is pwetty!
Not much in the way of lineart, but pwettiful.
The last one is nice, but it's not really going for the "bright colors" thing...
Pretty, but in an earthy way.
And the first link doesn't work for me.
:tard:

ah. the first one is a picture of some Monarch butterfly wings.

[ongaku_itsumademo]

I must be psychic.
I just did one based on a Monarch's.
Though the shape turned out different so I'm not sure if I should use it...
Eh.
Also got too lazy to scan it, so I just took a pic with my webcam.
Sorry about the quality.

[Somatomay]

Wonderful. looks very nice.

[Myrin]

They sound lovely! Have a few suggestions for cleaning up the text a bit, nothing big, and of course all optional.

GENERAL
As you relax in a meadow watching the sky, you might be lucky enough to catch a glimpse of these beautiful creatures dancing in the air. Bright colors swirl through the sky as several butterfly wyverns leap into flight. These creatures take joy in riding the wind, and can be as dexterous as any butterfly. As any other wyvern, these creatures are attracted to shiny trinkets and pride themselves on their colorful, uniquely shaped wings.

This is going to sound incredibly picky, but too many "as" in too close an area. Perhaps start the next sentence with "Like"?

EGG
A colorful, webbed wing embraces the shell of this shiny egg.

Yeah, nitpicking again, but I don't think anyone's going to think it's embracing just the yolk. ;)

HATCHLING
(Contrast! Mwahaha!)
With an impatient chirrup, a small hatchling shatters its colorful shell. It looks like a wyvern, but it’s wings seem to be oddly shaped. As it unfurls them, you are amazed at the bright colors they boast. They remind you of both a butterfly’s and dragon’s wings. The tiny youngling bats its wings and manages to lift itself a few feet off of the ground before returning to your feet. You can already tell it will be a beautiful flier.

LOVE that hatchling image. Great potential there. Consistency in description - the egg talks about the colorful wing around a shiny shell, which to me indicates the shell itself is probably a single color. If I"m wrong on this, ignore me (but be sure to advise the spriter!). "Its" in the possessive has no apostrophe, that's strictly for the contraction of "It is". Probably the best description of the lot, very clear and easy to visualize.

ADULT
Picture Pending
Your tiny hatchling has grown up to become brightly patterned butterfly wyvern. It’s uniquely shaped wings and coloration set it apart from other wyverns. It is also smaller, only reaching your waist. It enjoys flitting overhead and waltzing on the wind to show off its hues. These creatures, as you have found, are extremely coveted among the women of Synara for their beautiful colors and manageability.

Question on the wings - you talk about unique shape and coloring, but so far the concept drawings all seem to be wyvern/dragon shape, but with butterfly coloration.

You've three sentences in a row that start with "It," you may want to scramble that a little. Try moving the sentence around so it doesn't start with the subject perhaps? Or change how you go at it, maybe something like "No other dragonkin are so small either; this wyvern barely comes to your waist." Which isn't exactly what I mean either, but just an example.

I'm not being too confusing, am I?

Edit: That monarch wing you posted, now THAT is unique shape as well as color. Not so rounded as a butterfly wing, but not as bat-like as the other dragonkin.

[ongaku_itsumademo]

Hmm.
Maybe the monarch would be for males and the spotted purple for females?
I'll have to fix the hatchling too, won't I?
*sigh*
I'll get to work tomorrow.

Lodrelhai:
Thanks so much!
I'll go edit now.


EDIT:
The changes to the wings are that I made the arm shorter and extended the 4th and 5th fingers.
So it looks better with a long 1st finger?
Maybe I'll try that.

[lorna14]

BEAUTIFUL!!!!

[Dr Starchild]

I love the butterfly idea but everyone's aways doing monarch butterflies
and no one ever draws my favourite butterfly:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Inachis_io

[MagicQueen]

Oh, wow I like this one mostly because I love butterflies :]

[AmarinRose]

Pretty pretty pretty.... Maybe this could be a hybrid creature, between wyverns and puvias? Or the next quest creature - answer riddles to find the egg hidden in a meadow! I know I'd love one.

[Axiluvia]

Heh, if this one wasn't done, I would have submitted something along these lines.